EVANESCENCE
Revising the Fourth Mountain
In any literary work, no matter how subtly or beautifully crafted, or even if created by a renowned author, there are always statements, wording, scenes, and other elements that can be revised or altered to enhance the piece, especially for the benefit of the readers. As writers, we need these suggestions and revisions not only to improve our works but also to grow as creators. Join us as we provide suggestions and make changes to some of the essays in Rosales’ "Ascending the Fourth Mountain," demonstrating how our critiques and recommendations can make these essays more appealing and effective.
Group 1
After selling everything we had, I reduced my family’s life to a few pieces of luggage...
and we got on a slow boat to Davao without our beloved pets and treasured belongings...
Group 2
I was not told that the underground had married Boy to Bel.
Maita remained silent about her knowledge of the Underground's involvement in Boy's deception within the family...
Group 3
I read Susan’s letter dated August 7, 1979:
Dear Mommy. I miss you. Come home. I love you Mommy...